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    A Life in a Day (Song for Father)

    I composed this little song to my own words for my father.

    If my Life consisted of just a single day
    And none but you alone were I to know,
    I'd live my precious seconds with great thankfulness away,
    Knowing that my joy to you would owe.

    Father, father, father, father,
    All to you I owe.
    Father, father, father, father,
    All to you I owe.

    And when that eve I'd lay me down for first and final time,
    My light and happy heart to gently cease,
    I'd turn to you and say before my clock's final chime--
    "Father, all I ever knew was peace."

    Father, father, father, father,
    All I knew was peace.
    Father, father, father, father,
    All I knew was peace.
    All I knew was peace.
    All I knew was peace.

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    Re: A Life in a Day (Song for Father)

    What a lovely folk song, Sean. And an unusually warm tribute to a father. It's great that you posted it for us to hear.

    You used a total of 3 Mandolins from World I think? The lead - then on the chorus, a 2nd one comes in on the right, and a 3rd one just left of center is double picking the melody. That gives a nice full sound.

    There are two chord choices which I'd like to hear differently. After the appropriate, folk simplicity of the song, ending on the major 7th chord sounds out of place. M7ths are beautiful on their own, but when out of context they can stick out, and I feel that with your song, it suddenly shifts the mood to something too modern sounding.

    The other chord choice is that you don't go to a straight 7th on the transitions between sections. The traditional element of shifting to a 7th on transitions is appropriate for folk music, and while of course you don't Have to use it, I felt it could have been used here effectively.

    Hope you don't mind those observations. I don't usually suggest alternate chords - but it's not very often that we have actual songs posted here, and it piqued my interest.

    Thanks.

    Randy

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