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    Forgiven - A Mini Opera Demo

    I posted this vignette type of opera on this forum years ago. I've included the words and brief scenario.

    Forgiven

    The woman: Violin
    The man: Viola
    Female voice: Oboe
    Male voice: Tuba

    Piano intro.


    Scene 1.

    A man and a woman are arguing. The woman slaps the mans face and begins to cry. The man walks off looking sad.

    A woman fell in love
    with a man who said his love was true [female voice with chorus]
    and he would cherish her forever
    But she was only being kept
    for he cared not where he slept
    He broke her heart
    and now she sings this song

    Where, where went all the love [the woman repeated twice]
    the love that broke my heart
    and left me crying
    When, when will I find love
    love to fill my heart
    and I'm smiling
    Yes, I know that I should be strong
    Please, please love come again
    I feel so all alone

    How could I not see what I have done [the man with woman on repeat]
    is what I never wanted
    Will our love be washed away
    with the tears that flow from your heart
    Without you there will be no joy
    No one to touch and whisper to in the night
    Please , please love come again
    I feel so all alone


    Scene 2.
    The man attempts to caress the woman but is rejected. The man falls to his knees and begins to weep. The woman then lifts him up into her bosom and they caress each other smiling.

    And here they are [female voice and chorus]
    so close, yet so far apart
    She makes the choice to forgive
    She takes him back into her heart [male voice chimes in]

    Now, now I'm in your arms [man and woman with chorus]
    your warmth caresses my soul
    and makes me happy
    Joy, joy in what we have
    until our journey ends
    And forever
    We will live our lives
    with each other in our hearts
    Love, love has come again
    we'll never be alone
    Love, love has come again
    It sings a lovely song

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    Re: Forgiven - A Mini Opera Demo

    I like your mini opera. You are saying this was shown earlier. If you still have the means of changing your mix, I think the first solo is around 1:00, it would be helpful to enjoy your solos and choir more if you could cut back on the volume of the piano from that point as you whish and where you wish. I do enjoy the piano very much, but I hardly can make out your nice solos.
    I hope you don't mind this, if I would not have liked your piece I would have just complimented you, but I would like to hear it again....

    Ted

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    Re: Forgiven - A Mini Opera Demo

    Hi Ted

    I posted it here in 2008 so the software I used to create it is kind of an antique now.

    This wasn't really intended to be a real listening experience but a basic demo for a possible live performance at the time. I believe all the instruments are audible enough to follow along with the reading of the words.

    I'm glad you liked it!




    Phil

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    Re: Forgiven - A Mini Opera Demo

    The music will gild the story, for sure. It becomes very emotional since you also give the story. I like it most when the viola enters to support and complete the violin, as it should be in the real world...
    Well done.

    Kjell

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    Re: Forgiven - A Mini Opera Demo

    Thanks Kjell!

    Our Anna's Bay community choir director wanted to perform this as principal tenor with his Seattle pro soprano friend and musicians. Alas, the recession hit and these folks scattered. The choir survived with it's director but it was on a very tight budget. I wouldn't have made a dime but it would have been fun to hear it performed.




    Phil

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    Re: Forgiven - A Mini Opera Demo

    This is quite a lovely piece.. Very well put together.. Each melody really stands on it's own. Love when the viola part..
    Unlike some opera's, where the melody seems 2nd to the particular lyrics being sung.. Your melodies totally stand on their own without a human voice.. Strong accomplishment..

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    Re: Forgiven - A Mini Opera Demo

    Thanks angelonyc!

    Appreciate the kind words.





    Phil

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    Very nice, Mister Phil. This is something of which you can be proud. Keep up the good work.

    Best,

    Larry Alexander

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    Re: Forgiven - A Mini Opera Demo

    Hi Phil,

    I do agree with the fellow members. It is a beautiful piece of music with emotional depth and lovely melodies. However, Ted is right as well. The piano part (accompaniment) is attires too dominant and stands in the way of the expression of the voices. This is a matter of mixing and stage depth. Push the piano a bit to the back and do a little cut on the volume. You will be surprised how different your lovely piece will sound.
    And as Larry said, it is a composition to be proud of. The technical shortcomings are not the main thing here. Performed live on stage, these things will correct themselves!

    Max

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    Re: Forgiven - A Mini Opera Demo

    Quote Originally Posted by larryalex1 View Post
    Very nice, Mister Phil. This is something of which you can be proud. Keep up the good work.

    Best,

    Larry Alexander
    Thanks musch Larry!

    I hope your feeling well.




    Phil

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